tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3097573368575371682.post5868174394052319902..comments2023-06-29T09:42:26.046-05:00Comments on Sentiments from an Enslaved Sissy: My First Attempt at Fetish Fictionfur sissyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06773975470940525031noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3097573368575371682.post-75429330637811590262016-05-27T11:50:13.407-05:002016-05-27T11:50:13.407-05:00Thank you very much, Lady Grey. I'm very happ...Thank you very much, Lady Grey. I'm very happy to hear that.<br /><br />I believe I have figured out the way in which I will present things in general but have only realized it after already writing the second part. I subconsciously did it a little but I'm feeling directed now.<br /><br />I'm hoping to maintain a balance where the environment may be a bit fantasy-laden but I'm trying to keep the interactions between sub and Mistress intimate in a way that speaks to her more than to the sub.fur sissyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06773975470940525031noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3097573368575371682.post-87902260741941105382016-05-27T10:11:08.276-05:002016-05-27T10:11:08.276-05:00Very nice, fur. I love that you're hogtied at...Very nice, fur. I love that you're hogtied at the beginning as you orally serve your Mistress, and that when you are untied, you're soon in another prescribed position and expected to continue servicing her. Interspersing these two sexual scenes, you have Mistress keeping you fully aroused and "wanting" by displaying herself and having you help her don her robe. Clever writing and nicely familiar to me, I might add.<br /><br />The addition of the new female persona and her rules is a nice teaser for what's to come. Can't wait for the next chapter!Lady Greyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10795130564028111447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3097573368575371682.post-9164720677580094992016-05-26T10:25:28.024-05:002016-05-26T10:25:28.024-05:00Thank you very much, Miss Lily. It makes me happy...Thank you very much, Miss Lily. It makes me happy that you were able to get too into it.<br /><br />The fantasy part would have been clear if this scene was "in order," as it's actually meant to contrast a reality check between fantasy and actual practice. My fantasies swirl so dark that it's a constant reminder of "be careful what you wish for."<br /><br />The warmth of the Mistress character is also part of something larger... unwavering faith in a sub... the unexpected changes in feelings over time while acclimating to mew situations, etc.<br /><br />As for the sub's thoughts, I agree with you. The first parts are representative of my thoughts or lack of during intimacy. I get hyper-focused on every nuance of her body's reactions and adapt to meet them. By the time of the discussion, my head would have recovered. I will revise the latter section and add what I think the mental impulses would be, but probably in anmore generalized sense. The overall vibe is will probably carry fear of inadequacy, abandonment, and confusion. <br /><br />I initially kept the thoughts out to guve the announcement a greater impact but that just doesn't seem right in hindsight.<br /><br />Thank you againfur sissyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06773975470940525031noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3097573368575371682.post-8207750219706124552016-05-26T09:52:27.220-05:002016-05-26T09:52:27.220-05:00I enjoyed this fantasy. I wanted to send you my th...I enjoyed this fantasy. I wanted to send you my thoughts sooner but I tried reading this in the middle of the night and ended up too into it to really give the attention it deserves. After I ...ummm.... "gained focus", I finished reading after some much needed sleep.<br /><br /><br />I really like that you painted a picture with all the senses within the first two sentences. I also liked that the Mistress is not just some cold person without emotion like In some porn. Furthermore, you did exceptionally well in showing the love between Mistress and slave, and evidence of time passed within the relationship. Example of this below:<br />"Her head tilts up and our eyes meet. I love her. She is my Goddess. She smiles and her eyes are warm, I feel them looking into my soul.<br />We remain like this for several minutes."<br /><br />I also loved seeing slaves reaction to the new rules and his apprehension to the change. I wish there was a comment referring to the slaves internal thoughts about the fantasy that would be coming true. (Was it obeying two beautiful femdoms at once, or extended chastity, or all of it? Was he regretting the fantasy, or maybe having conflicted emotions?) I do think my fascination with the slaves desire and emotions fuel that curiosity. I imagine that the target audience here would be submissives making those additional thoughts of the slave counterproductive. Leaving those emotions open will give a stronger connection with the reader as he will naturally think of his own likes, limits, and fantasies. I think it will cause anyone's stomach to feel a little right as they reach this part.<br /><br />Thank you for sharing. <br />And keep up the good work! <br /><br /><br />Miss Lilyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05516012472453053586noreply@blogger.com